The End

100 Word Challenge for Grown-Ups, week 39
A nice straightforward one this week. Prompt shown in bold.
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The scented, white sheets formed a soft envelope around her. She looked peaceful and serene with no sign of the pain inside which had ravaged her body for months. The family surrounded the bed, watching her chest rise and fall – the interval growing ever wider.  Then, she was looking down at them, as if floating somewhere overhead. There was warmth and light as she watched proceedings below, those she loved around the bed, silent.
‘I’m exhausted. Shut the door behind you…..’ she whispered with a sigh.
She held herself back momentarily as they watched her lifeless body, realisation dawning, and began to weep for their terrible loss.
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15 responses to “The End

  1. Utterly beautiful. A rather interesting counterpoint to my piece written before I saw yours. I hope my departing (when it should come) allows me to leave with grace.

  2. Lynda, this was so sad, but so peaceful at the same time. I really liked the split viewpoint of what the family saw, and what she saw.

  3. And a lovely picture to go with the sunset of life. Beautiful writing.

  4. What a peaceful way to go in the end.

  5. Oh my goodness – how beautiful but tragic. It was written so simply but really says so much. Wonderful!

  6. Beautifully written and very sad.

  7. That was excellent and so beautifully written.

  8. Wonderful take on the prompt, beautiful and poignant.

  9. Beautifully expressed. REally well written.

  10. V serene. Given the choice, isn't this how we'd all choose to go? Hmmm, maybe saving your friends in battle or loved ones from danger for the more Viking among us 😉

  11. jonesingafter40

    Wow. A beautiful piece and that last line was devastating.

  12. Wow, too! a lovely departure and a sending with simplicity. thank you for writing…very powerful imagery here…

  13. Agree with all the above. Touching piece.

  14. Beautifully written and a wonderful use of the prompt. 🙂

  15. A beautiful piece of writing.Some great imagery here.

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