This week’s prompt for the 100 Word Challenge for Grown-Ups is a picture once again. I am delighted that it is this picture, as it fits perfectly with another part of my book ‘The Year’. In this excerpt, Sarah visits the house her parents have bought in France for the first time.
Sarah stepped into the dew-soaked garden of the French house her parents had bought, taking in the sights and sounds of this beautiful place. It wasn’t a big garden but each corner brought a new delight to the senses. Sarah ran her hands over the creaking shutters of the house, marvelling at the wood which had witnessed so many years as the eyelids of this house. The eyes of the house itself left Sarah breathless with wonder. In spite of old age, the gleam was still there, reflecting the greenery of the plants and the dappled light of each season.
Oh lovely! The imagery of the windows as eyes is very clever. Super piece of writing.
I agree with Alison – I love the idea of the windows as eyes and the shutters as eyelids.
Ooh, you went for windows as eyes… me too, albeit not so explicitly!
great imagery, loved it.
I thought the window looked French – or Scandinavian! – too, and I agree with you – I always want to know what houses have witnessed, particularly the 'eyes'! Your piece made me want to jump out of our rain-soaked landscape and go to France, immeiately!Thanks for your comment on my page!
Lovely, Lynda. Very evocative.
"Each" season changes the timing from seeing the house for the first time to seeing the house over time…not sure that's what you intended or not.Robin
I think this is beautiful. I do agree with Robin- it just needs a little proofreading.
The is beautiful. I love the imagery you used. x
I love the idea of shutters being 'eyelids'. Very clever. It is great to read your description of her senses in this new place. Really liked this one L!
A very peaceful piece . .